“Since the return from her stay on the moon,
She listens like spring and talks like June.”
Excerpt from “Drops of Jupiter (Tell Me)” released and sung by Train ©2001
Songwriters: Pat Monahan/Scott Michael Underwood/ Robert S. Hotchkiss
Don’t get me wrong, I like this song. It sounds great, but what do those two lines really mean? In fact, I’d be happy to know what just one line means.
Oh, yeah. “She listens like spring and talks like June.” The last words of each line rhyme. The words evoke pleasant images, but are they good enough? Ah, where have we writers heard that question before? And how many times? If you’re a constant editor like me, probably a whole galaxy worth.
So how do you deal with word selection? A thesaurus, roulette wheel, or typing “Insert clever word(s) here.” Please tell me by leaving a comment.
Meanwhile I’ll ponder that 1980’s Irish Spring commercial about their soap being as fresh as a country road in Ireland after a spring rain.
That is mud, isn’t it?
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